a cross you carved
in your arm
under the direction
of the holy spirit
has faded
you're left
with a broken compass
and a shitty scar
a blue rubberband
a watch
a silly band
and a reminder
'impossible is nothing'
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Ooh. First stanza, last couple of lines: genius. I like this one, a lot.
ReplyDeleteThank you. Do you think it would be better without the second stanza?
ReplyDeleteMaybe take out the "shitty scar" line. Not that I don't like it, but I think a line break there would be more effective. The line makes the broken compass line less effective.
ReplyDeleteshitty scar was my favorite
ReplyDeleteI edited this poem
ReplyDeleteto end at the line
'impossible is nothing'